Script Review: [NicoNico] Fate/Zero – 14 This entry was posted by brainchild.
I haven’t seen the first season, but luckily, the mistakes I point out don’t require any prior knowledge of FSN.
r/a/ge level: 10/100. Honorifics are present. NicoNico uses Western name order. No translations for the opening and ending. No one cares about NicoNico.
“If this was anything like a monster movie, we’d be goners.”
The fuck? “All of our efforts are barely enough to keep it from coming ashore.”
Observer > eyewitness.
“This is getting out of hand” or “This is now beyond our control.”
No > not. Somewhat debatable.
“Yet even their combined strength isn’t enough to kill that disgusting thing?”
“Learn your place, mongrel!”
If any of the rip groups have mongrel capitalized, they better hire some new editors. I mean, would you capitalize “bitch” or “fucker”? (The answer is no.)
Heaven should be capitalized, or it could be changed to divine providence or something.
What I liked:
It’s not Shakespeare, but it’s understandable. The exchange with Rin’s dad and Disgustingface was okay, but everything could use some sprucing up – sprucing up that I’m not willing to waste any more time on.
What I didn’t like:
Lackluster phrasing choices and some errors by NicoNico.
Overall Grade: 3 Noble Phantasms… out of 5.