Translation review: [Eveyuu] Hentai Ouji to Warawanai Neko 01

Prison

“The sky is clear except for a few clouds.” “The sky is clear except for a few friggin huge storm clouds.” See the difference? Oscar Wilde said what he said in prison.

Quote

No. He’s literally quoting (the Japanese translation of) Wilde’s De Profundis. The line in question goes “I don’t regret for a single moment having lived for pleasure.” I really don’t even know where the second half of the line came from.

Frame

“I was framed/tricked!”

Pique

Love this line.

Trouble

No. He’s saying that at this rate she’ll make her the next president… and that job’s a true pain in the ass.

Song

The song translation’s okay.

Hottie

“Look on the bright side: that blazing hottie’s got high hopes for you.”

Honest

He’s honest with himself. The problem is that he’s not honest with others.

Desires

No. “So you want to drown your life in worldly desires?”

Charm

The point is that he calls them charming (魅惑).

Eros

Do you really think that erotic = perverted? I sure disagree. (I often have this argument with Japanese girls.  They don’t even notice that having a healthy sex drive doesn’t mean you’re a satyr.)

Vow

Two elements missing. First, hopes and dreams about/of girls. Second, they vowed to follow those dreams.

Mount

I’m not sure if ippon-sugi (一本杉, lone cedar) is actually the name of the hill or just the description of it, but it definitely doesn’t deserve the “Mount” prefix.

Business

無愛想 (buaisou) doesn’t really equal “it means business”.

T+

Line mistimed. Starts about two words late.

Legend

It’s not about the speed, but the scale of the rumor.

Phrase

While it is a literal translation, I believe that the phrase “princess-carry” doesn’t exist in English.

Cut

He starts asking him why he’s not at the club practice then, but gets interrupted.

Anyone

Anyone = Even parrots. She uses animal metaphors all the time. Also: essays?

T++

Line mistimed, starts two words late.

Sheep

She actually says “follow me around blindly like a sheep”. Close as 執事 (shitsuji) and 羊 (hitsuji) are in speech, kind of an understandable mistake here.

No

He doesn’t say “tough” (きつい kitsui), he says 生粋 (kissui, genuine). She’ll not “shoot any guy down”, she voices social status differences without consideration.

Old

I can’t see why anyone would be happy to see “old boobs”. Youto sure doesn’t say that.

Deathly

I enjoyed putting lots of deathly’s in C2B back in the day, but I’m afraid this isn’t the correct usage of the word.

Smile

The point is that the cat took her smile for itself.

Bleed

These subs must be female and during their period because this is quite a bleed…

Attempt

Nope. He didn’t ask him about it, he tried to make her use a facade.

Metaphor

Well now. If you change the metaphor to another animal (from cheetah to clam in this case), at least don’t make a typo.

Flag

Not “white flag”. He calls her 難攻不落 (nankou-furaku, impregnable).

Conclusion: Okay

Accuracy: 6/10; Flow: 7/10; Atmosphere: 6/10

Making Tsukiko read like a robot is not right. She speaks normally, just in a deadpan voice. Sadly, voice itself can’t be expressed in writing. But that’s not all… While the general accuracy wouldn’t be bad, and most of the sentences go the right way, as soon as you include details in the accuracy, the score slumps. Most of the mistakes aren’t too bad, but they are still mistakes and there’s a lot of them. Not to mention there are timing mistakes even I can notice, and I’m really not your timer material. You can probably get the basic idea of the story from this release, but don’t watch it if you want to enjoy it to the fullest. It’s bottom-line okay, but remember: even Hadena’s been there before. This isn’t the quality I’d expect from a release that Evetaku is involved in and definitely not something you can afford with all the competition.

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8 thoughts on “Translation review: [Eveyuu] Hentai Ouji to Warawanai Neko 01

  1. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

    I say blame it on the cucumber and call it a day. He’s usually more critical of my TL, anyway.

    …Oh shit, am I beginning to rhyme? That’s not good. My poems ain’t fine.

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