Script/typesetting review: [Nishi-Taku] Tamayura ~more aggressive~ – 02

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Why not “Prez” or “Pres”? I guarantee “President” will probably be too long sooner or later. Just shooting yourself in the foot.

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What is hoboro-yaki? No seriously, what is it? Even I have no idea what that is. Also, a bunch of foods are translated later in the episode, so ???

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I don’t think you need a linebreak for a line this short, especially considering how small the font is.

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Oh god, I was dreading this. Why bring attention to how she ends her sentences? Just because she may use a little different ending particles does not mean you need to tack on something to the translation, because people do not do this in English.

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See above.

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No->Nope or No->I haven’t.

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There has to be a better way to translate that than “class cleaning duty monitor”.

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Thank you for adding some character to your subs and not being painfully literal like the last review I did.

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I mean, I know it’s supposed to go together with “played”, but “unplayed-with animals” is still very weird.

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“I won at rock-paper-scissors.”

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This show is really pushing the whole “aggressive” thing, huh?

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Is this supposed to be the alt dialogue style? The border color isn’t different enough, IMO.

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Period outside of the quotation marks? Does Nishi-Taku use British English?

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i cry everytim @ Onee-samas

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Hi I like this why can’t you do this for the other girl’s verbal tic because that would be way better and less awkward thanks for your time.

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This isn’t a question?

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“Congrats on the Photography Club”.

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“New President”, if it’s supposed to be a direct address.

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See above about quotation marks and periods.

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Thanks for not ignoring these puns like some people would (however unfunny they may be).

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I like this.

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This is not a question either.

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I believe that exclamation point belongs outside the quotation marks, m8.


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This font is not even close.

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The font should have more blur.

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>typeset sign
>dialogue is in front of it the entire time so no one can read it

Good job.

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This goes by so fast I had to pause to read it so… good job?

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I’d go with a font that has bigger serifs.

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More blur. Also what are with the []? People don’t use them in English like that.

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Much better amount of blur.

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Bottom part is too dark.

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The photographer part is too dark. The colors for the part on the right are wrong. The “Honorable Mention” doesn’t have enough blur.

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This part is too dark too.

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And now the sign is too small to read.

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Should get bigger as it comes toward the screen.

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The color on these is a little, like… purple? It should be more grayish.

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No problems.

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The color may match on the right side, but it sure doesn’t on the left side.

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This is fine.

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Should’ve used the same font for the exclamation point as you used for the first part.

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The one sign a few above this should look more like this.

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Looks good.

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I don’t really understand the placement.

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More blur pls.

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I hope the problem here is obvious.


Editing: 4.5/5. While there are some issues, they put a lot of effort into some things that an average release wouldn’t. I mean, I hate how they handled some stuff, but I have to give them props for the rest.

Typesetting: C+. I feel like whoever typeset this knew how to typeset, but just didn’t put very much effort into it.

Timing: Mostly good, but a few lines ended too early because they were snapped to “fake” keyframes.

This entry was posted by herkz.

4 thoughts on “Script/typesetting review: [Nishi-Taku] Tamayura ~more aggressive~ – 02

  1. >Period outside of the quotation marks? Does Nishi-Taku
    >use British English?

    The American quotation rules are bullshit. Convince me otherwise.

    • Doesn’t matter. If they want to use American English for the rest, they should use American English rules for quotations.

      • They don’t really have to, and there’s plenty of fansubs that don’t. Underwater’s standard is to use American English but British quotation style, and you should know it’s allowed on a show-by-show basis at Commie too (e.g. SNAFU last season). All that really matters is to be consistent with it.

        • Well IMO they should. It’s pretty silly to not use American English rules if the subs are in American English.

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